Yikes, that is a very vivid image! I like that the first sentence is a mile and the second one is two words. It emphasizes the stubborn twitching. I'm going to his updated post to vote in a bit:)
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Yikes, that is a very vivid image! I like that the first sentence is a mile and the second one is two words. It emphasizes the stubborn twitching. I'm going to his updated post to vote in a bit:)
The first one was so long that it nearly got too far away from why he'd circled back around.
Thanks for reading and commenting, I was afraid it was too horrible to write.