Hi,
Thought I would visit your work to get a better idea of you as a writer. The name of this story caught my attention.
You have a really accessible writing style. It's the sort of verbal fluency Mickey Spillane was known for (although he never wrote about acid, I'm pretty sure). There's economy, humor and vivid scene description.
I remember once walking into a tailor shop and asking if the seamstress could custom sew a dress for me. She looked me up and down and said, "You couldn't afford it." That's the truth, and it wasn't an acid trip :))
You like to write, that's obvious and you have a knack for it. Writing doesn't come so easily to me (fiction) but I do love it also.
Glad I checked out this story.