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RE: Un-spoke-spell [Day 22]

in #dsound7 years ago (edited)

This is my favourite one >
Scroll break the effects of the lingering spell:
digital, derogatory, devil I repel.
A verse to shatter its decadent duration;
A quatrain to seal away a dangerous formation.

This one is very strong
Thought – eyes – people – speech
world – tongues – unfurling – rungs
repeating – sentiments – in new – alignment
elaborate – archetype – emphatic – confinement.

You have a lot of the word break in all of them though and it sort of tripped me up. I know it is most likely intentional but I have the feeling that most of these (feel the last one is a bit without heart , god you must hate me by now :P ) are so polished that using that kind of blunt repetition takes form them ... Seriously though save for the last one and the lots of broken I really loved them ... don't eat me ...