Woohoo! After such along time, I'm able to taste the sweet sweet TRAIL token again! Thank you guys for the recognition, and thank you @meesterboom for the nom! :D
I've been a very poor friend! When I got so busy with work that I couldn't come on here, I got so behind that I've never found the time to catch up. But today is the day! This chapter had me on the edge of my seat the whole way through, and now I'm rushing away to see the Silver Lining and the next adventure.
No worries, my friend! Don't even stress about it :) I've had a rough couple of weeks as well, so I feel you. I'm just glad you're able to find the time to catch up now. Thanks for the compliment, and I hope you enjoy the story you missed :D
"The sound of their scratching and squeaking echoed throughout the stronghold. It was only a matter of time until they compromised its structural integrity. The four walls wept at its impending destruction."
Oh this section really pulled me in. What a scene of suspense you create bro, well done.
" "Let’s talk," I commanded to them. “I come in peace. Those giants — your enemy — is my enemy. Let us work together and—”
They interrupted me with undecipherable chattering. The creatures didn’t seem to understand my call for peace, and I didn’t know how to act it out for them."
This saddens me because I can only imagine the frustration Zepp feels from always being misunderstood and not being able to communicate with others fluidly without stress, worry or unintentional friction.
"I waved my hands to the side, pushing myself against the clouds. Once my body was perpendicular to the ground, I steadied my breathing and cleared my mind. I clenched my fist, as I built up enough speed to rocket through the growing number of opponents gathered. This was all very exhilarating!"
You can say that again! When he started to fly with the wind, I was instantly in the action scenes of a great movie.
""That’s how you do it," I whispered to the wind."
Another favorite characteristic is how he whispers often, especially when he mutters under his breath "traitor" at Tetan.
Overall wonderful chapter, after reading the comments, I wasn't sure what this chapter was revealing other than a dream state or his imagination as if he was playing but the latter is highly unlikely because Ledd doesn't ever seem to lose focus on trying to escape and I didn't think he was recounting his plans of escape in his head, so my initial thought of dreaming was more spot on since he is still recovering from his sickness. Wonderfully written bro
Spot on!! I wanted to tell a fever dream sequence where he's in the giants' shoes. We (the giants) don't understand the way he communicates, much like how he doesn't understand the undecipherable chatter of his new opponents. I didn't want to say it outright, but I tried to convey it by noting that he has grown relative to his environment. He's a giant now, and that is a real nightmare scenario for him haha!
Wow pre. Your works are really great. And your story - I enjoy it. It's packed with lots of action and adrenaline on the main character's part. What you do to us readers is the same with what best selling authors do. I'm really looking forward to reading the next chapters. I will also read how these all started.
You're bringing me back to reading novels. I read the whole Percy series and it was almost like this, and you give more details. Your vocabulary is also huge!
Proud pinoy here :) Thanks for sharing your story to us!
Thanks, pre! I'm so glad that it has that effect for you. I wouldn't go as to say I'm in the same league as best-selling authors, though I just try to tell stories that I hope readers would enjoy. I do hope that more Pinoy authors achieve more prominence here. One day, we'll pave the way and make it a reality :D I appreciate you taking the time to leave a feedback!
Haha, nice lead into the dream. I thought all was well and he really had just woken up. I like the fight scenes too! They are classic action film-esque stuff!! You have a way with the descriptive writing!
Thanks, dude! I'm so glad it was interpreted that way. It surely was the intention. I was really afraid that people would just dismiss it as a dream from the start. The nod to classic action films are intentional as well, and the connection will be revealed in the coming chapters. Being complimented for my descriptive writing is such a rare occurrence, so I treasure each and every one. To think, this is coming from a fellow writer whose writing style I so admire. It really means a lot! :D
What a cool dream sequence, and a brilliant way to write his nap! I really got a sense of that wind in the beginning, what a great lead in, I was totally unprepared :)
Once again you've transported me to childhood, I remember a dream I once had that also involved miniature attackers...except they were based on a movie I saw called Willow, lol. Just like life, dreams seemed to have so much more action, energy and magic when I was a kid, and you captured the power of that.
Once again you have outdone yourself, and as always I look forward to the next hour in Ledd's life!
Thank you for continually providing me with a source of encouragement, my friend! Your feedback and thoughts have proven to be quite invaluable :)
I can't say I've watched Willow before, but it looks interesting. I didn't know that Warwick Davis starred in his own movie before! #til Dreams really do cover a wide range. I owe it to the power of our brains. One day you're dreaming about miniature attackers, the next you're dreaming about The Chlorella Project ;)
The internal debate regarding the inclusion of dreams in the story was a rather lengthy one, but logic won out. I'll be discussing it a bit in this week's SILVER LINING :)
PS I happened upon an advertisement earlier that's very reminiscent of Today Again. The movie is entitled Before I Fall. Thought you would want to know.
My dream are nuts. The other night I dreamt about a friend I've met on here's soul mate, haha! He asked if I often play cupid in my dreams LOL. No, but I did that night ;)
I will be looking for the silver lining :)
I looked up Before I Fall...at least it's involving the mystery of her death and only takes place over a week, not quite what I'm doing with mine. I can't say I'm surprised, people tend to be connected and things often become a trend. That happened to me with the vampire story, I had started working on the initial idea before Twilight, and then bam the market was flooded with vampires.
Oh, I just meant the day repeating aspect of it is very reminiscent of Today Again. I guess that's where the similarities end haha I just heard it on the radio, and it made me think of your story.
Bittersweet story with Twilight. I do agree with that sentiment though, and I must say that it has happened to me quite a lot. That is, for writing and for programming apps. There's always something that pops up which looks exactly the same when you're in the middle of creating something. That's why my current approach is to try and think of something very offbeat.
Ach! There goes the surprise reveal and my whole discussion for the latest SILVER LINING! haha! You hit it right in the head, my friend. Good eye! You have such a remarkable grasp in terms of interpretation that it often seems like you're peeking at my notes whenever you're commenting. I'm so glad to have a supporter such as yourself! Thank you for continually leaving your thoughts, I appreciate it greatly :D
That pressure to not disappoint is pretty terrible isn't it :) You pour so much into these that even in the unlikely event that I found something disappointing I would still appreciate it for the amount of blood, sweat and tears that has gone into it.
ps - I'm currently working on the next piece, it is not a sketch therefore taking forever.
Haha! Yeah.. But, I guess I'm slowly resigning to the fact that I can't please everyone so I might as well just do the best I can. Thank you for appreciating the effort put into this. A lot of people take that for granted, but I do the same for the posts and people I support.
Looking forward to your next piece! I think it's shaping up to be a great one, considering the passion you're injecting into it :D
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Woohoo! After such along time, I'm able to taste the sweet sweet TRAIL token again! Thank you guys for the recognition, and thank you @meesterboom for the nom! :D
I've been a very poor friend! When I got so busy with work that I couldn't come on here, I got so behind that I've never found the time to catch up. But today is the day! This chapter had me on the edge of my seat the whole way through, and now I'm rushing away to see the Silver Lining and the next adventure.
No worries, my friend! Don't even stress about it :) I've had a rough couple of weeks as well, so I feel you. I'm just glad you're able to find the time to catch up now. Thanks for the compliment, and I hope you enjoy the story you missed :D
"The sound of their scratching and squeaking echoed throughout the stronghold. It was only a matter of time until they compromised its structural integrity. The four walls wept at its impending destruction."
Oh this section really pulled me in. What a scene of suspense you create bro, well done.
" "Let’s talk," I commanded to them. “I come in peace. Those giants — your enemy — is my enemy. Let us work together and—”
They interrupted me with undecipherable chattering. The creatures didn’t seem to understand my call for peace, and I didn’t know how to act it out for them."
This saddens me because I can only imagine the frustration Zepp feels from always being misunderstood and not being able to communicate with others fluidly without stress, worry or unintentional friction.
"I waved my hands to the side, pushing myself against the clouds. Once my body was perpendicular to the ground, I steadied my breathing and cleared my mind. I clenched my fist, as I built up enough speed to rocket through the growing number of opponents gathered. This was all very exhilarating!"
You can say that again! When he started to fly with the wind, I was instantly in the action scenes of a great movie.
""That’s how you do it," I whispered to the wind."
Another favorite characteristic is how he whispers often, especially when he mutters under his breath "traitor" at Tetan.
Overall wonderful chapter, after reading the comments, I wasn't sure what this chapter was revealing other than a dream state or his imagination as if he was playing but the latter is highly unlikely because Ledd doesn't ever seem to lose focus on trying to escape and I didn't think he was recounting his plans of escape in his head, so my initial thought of dreaming was more spot on since he is still recovering from his sickness. Wonderfully written bro
Spot on!! I wanted to tell a fever dream sequence where he's in the giants' shoes. We (the giants) don't understand the way he communicates, much like how he doesn't understand the undecipherable chatter of his new opponents. I didn't want to say it outright, but I tried to convey it by noting that he has grown relative to his environment. He's a giant now, and that is a real nightmare scenario for him haha!
Wow pre. Your works are really great. And your story - I enjoy it. It's packed with lots of action and adrenaline on the main character's part. What you do to us readers is the same with what best selling authors do. I'm really looking forward to reading the next chapters. I will also read how these all started.
You're bringing me back to reading novels. I read the whole Percy series and it was almost like this, and you give more details. Your vocabulary is also huge!
Proud pinoy here :) Thanks for sharing your story to us!
Thanks, pre! I'm so glad that it has that effect for you. I wouldn't go as to say I'm in the same league as best-selling authors, though I just try to tell stories that I hope readers would enjoy. I do hope that more Pinoy authors achieve more prominence here. One day, we'll pave the way and make it a reality :D I appreciate you taking the time to leave a feedback!
Hey @hulkbuster, I just posted something today related to A Day In The Clouds, please try and check it out, I'm sure you can definitely appreciate it. https://steemit.com/originalmusic/@verbal-d/m-m-m-29-sliver-s-edge-of-ledd-s-silver-lining-collaborative-art-journey-with-everlove-original-beat
I thought I would share this with everyone who follows the series along with the Silver Lining.
Same with this one! Haha Again, no need to reply to this. I'm just making the comments even.
Haha, nice lead into the dream. I thought all was well and he really had just woken up. I like the fight scenes too! They are classic action film-esque stuff!! You have a way with the descriptive writing!
Thanks, dude! I'm so glad it was interpreted that way. It surely was the intention. I was really afraid that people would just dismiss it as a dream from the start. The nod to classic action films are intentional as well, and the connection will be revealed in the coming chapters. Being complimented for my descriptive writing is such a rare occurrence, so I treasure each and every one. To think, this is coming from a fellow writer whose writing style I so admire. It really means a lot! :D
What a cool dream sequence, and a brilliant way to write his nap! I really got a sense of that wind in the beginning, what a great lead in, I was totally unprepared :)
Once again you've transported me to childhood, I remember a dream I once had that also involved miniature attackers...except they were based on a movie I saw called Willow, lol. Just like life, dreams seemed to have so much more action, energy and magic when I was a kid, and you captured the power of that.
Once again you have outdone yourself, and as always I look forward to the next hour in Ledd's life!
Thank you for continually providing me with a source of encouragement, my friend! Your feedback and thoughts have proven to be quite invaluable :)
I can't say I've watched Willow before, but it looks interesting. I didn't know that Warwick Davis starred in his own movie before! #til Dreams really do cover a wide range. I owe it to the power of our brains. One day you're dreaming about miniature attackers, the next you're dreaming about The Chlorella Project ;)
The internal debate regarding the inclusion of dreams in the story was a rather lengthy one, but logic won out. I'll be discussing it a bit in this week's SILVER LINING :)
PS I happened upon an advertisement earlier that's very reminiscent of Today Again. The movie is entitled Before I Fall. Thought you would want to know.
My dream are nuts. The other night I dreamt about a friend I've met on here's soul mate, haha! He asked if I often play cupid in my dreams LOL. No, but I did that night ;)
I will be looking for the silver lining :)
I looked up Before I Fall...at least it's involving the mystery of her death and only takes place over a week, not quite what I'm doing with mine. I can't say I'm surprised, people tend to be connected and things often become a trend. That happened to me with the vampire story, I had started working on the initial idea before Twilight, and then bam the market was flooded with vampires.
Oh, I just meant the day repeating aspect of it is very reminiscent of Today Again. I guess that's where the similarities end haha I just heard it on the radio, and it made me think of your story.
Bittersweet story with Twilight. I do agree with that sentiment though, and I must say that it has happened to me quite a lot. That is, for writing and for programming apps. There's always something that pops up which looks exactly the same when you're in the middle of creating something. That's why my current approach is to try and think of something very offbeat.
Wow that is one hell of a fever dream! It is a fever dream right? RIGHT?! XD
Ach! There goes the surprise reveal and my whole discussion for the latest SILVER LINING! haha! You hit it right in the head, my friend. Good eye! You have such a remarkable grasp in terms of interpretation that it often seems like you're peeking at my notes whenever you're commenting. I'm so glad to have a supporter such as yourself! Thank you for continually leaving your thoughts, I appreciate it greatly :D
LoL! Looking forward to the Silver Lining discussion :D
You pretty much summed it up, but I still hope it wouldn't disappoint :D Looking forward to seeing your latest post soon as well!
That pressure to not disappoint is pretty terrible isn't it :) You pour so much into these that even in the unlikely event that I found something disappointing I would still appreciate it for the amount of blood, sweat and tears that has gone into it.
ps - I'm currently working on the next piece, it is not a sketch therefore taking forever.
Haha! Yeah.. But, I guess I'm slowly resigning to the fact that I can't please everyone so I might as well just do the best I can. Thank you for appreciating the effort put into this. A lot of people take that for granted, but I do the same for the posts and people I support.
Looking forward to your next piece! I think it's shaping up to be a great one, considering the passion you're injecting into it :D