those umber eyes drank my soul away
I liked that line as well 🙂
Funnily enough, the most impactful lines in creative writing (fiction or poetry) often come from someone/something quite personal. When I was writing this series I was in a relationship with a woman with the most soulful brown eyes ever. And that is what was going through my mind when I wrote that line. It was like her eyes drank my soul.
Because Ash is somewhat befuddled and still tripping tbh lol I added the part about 'drinking the soul away' as I felt that seemed a little more sinister, as sometimes things can seem in those sorts of altered states of consciousness.
Anyway, thanks for your comment and I'm glad you enjoyed this flash fiction @generikat
I am gonna keep them coming every day on listnerds as it is a 10 part series, that I challenged myself to write using the 5-minute freewrite prompts back in the day 🙂
It's amazing the impact our personal relationships have on our written expressions for sure, and I am so looking forward to wandering through all of your series! I would expound more but I have a track meet to get to and a graham cracker crust to bake before I do lol!
Hope you are having a glorious day!