Having read through what I’m guessing is a current draft of your forward, I would encourage you to start with this.
I’m not a doctor.
I’m just a Schizophrenic, BiPolar, Borderline, Anxiety & Depression Disordered, Addict who, somehow, is sitting writing this today, almost four years medication free and no further treatment necessary.
Which means you probably won’t believe me when I tell you there is, probably, nothing wrong with you either.
If you don’t quite believe me, yet, I invite you to read on a bit to see why I believe this may be true.
It’s very direct and to the point, and it really captures the readers’ attention and it invites us to read on.
If it needs to be any longer than that, perhaps you could describe your story a little after this brief forward.
Thanks for taking the time to read and the feedback.
Yeah - I actually did start with something similar and Alan thought I should build some credibility before I shared more of my personal experience.
My initial first draft was much more personal and (I thought) engaging and interesting for the general public because... well... it's more "real" and less academic and cold.
It was more of a story and less of a "paper".
Now I'm wondering if I should look at it again... hmmm.
Maybe I can connect you on Google docs and you can do a read and edit? Heck... I'm happy for you to write the story version if you want to. It's a pretty interesting story. And I don't really want to write it anymore.
This little book (K.I.S.S) is more just information based to get parents and professionals informed about a possibly more effective approach to mental health and addiction to prevent unnecessary medication of the kids. So I want it to be quite clinical and brief, I guess.
Although Ch 2 ended up being 75 pages and it still in final edit :/
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment :) I really appreciate your engagement on this one! 🙏
I guess you’re in a position to make that judgement. Either way, I’m commenting on the writing and what I think would improve it.
I adore you and thank you for stepping up for me :) But I've got this!
It is a VERY triggering topic / conversation that I'm opening up in this book...
Step back if you feel a strong reaction please. Breathe! Ground yourself. Take care of yourself first.
Your comment on the writing is insightful and sound.
As is your comment on "judgement". :)
You know exactly what is going on! You've got this! No need to argue or defend yourself. You're awesome. And you're perfect just as you are. 💥
Thanks for being you. I "see" you and I'm keeping you close! 😊❤️🙏
I don’t understand what you mean. I thought that schizophrenic is a word used to describe a person who has is or suffering from schizophrenia. Are you implying that since she has said that she no longer suffers from schizophrenia that she is not or cannot be labeled as schizophrenic?
I was just clarifying whether or not that is what you meant. I understand what you are saying now.
You're on the right track :)
Nicely noted!