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RE: THE LIZARD CAVE - XI

in Writing Club3 years ago

This is such a great story line. One helpful tip though, try substituting your I with something else in some parts of your story. The constant repetition might be cringe worthy for some people. For example... in this line of yours...

I got up on my feet swiftly and held the glowing Orb in my hands, I remember Abin told me
Getting up to my feet with glowing orb in my hands, I remember Abin told me...

Hehehe. Just a suggestion from a fiction fan. See you soon.
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First person POV does has its limitations but you are correct, I was a bit too liberal with the "I"

Thanks for the feedback and enjoying the read 🙂

True that. I read a lot of first POV and i find it amazing how they still get to play with words...
Hehe. It is a pleasure

hey i just read my comment back - and i probably could have thought of a better word than cringeworthy! hahaha - pardon that word please!😅

lol It's alright, Actually, it was a solid tip that you gave me. what you pointed out was a gap in the writing that would have gradually gotten out of hand cause I didn't take notice of it.

part of being a creative is taking things with a grain of salt. 😃

😅I guess so...Thank you for not picking offence