First just want to say, big respect for writin your original music
You are getting better with time
Honestly the whole song idea is fire
I hear it in my head how it is supposed to sound
Your singing needs more work and practice
Your notes are off and the melody is not in the right key
But as far as structure and song layout and the message and the lyrics
And the meaning and context, plus your flowing, (the rhymes could be improved upon)
All that is great, and I can tell you wrote this with your heart mind and soul
Which makes the song profound and powerfully deep.
Send me the beat to this song, i want to show you how you can make improvements on it for the future in case you perform it somewhere else.
You can reach me on discord or telegram at @VerbalD
Big thank you for your response on this,
We keep hitting the resistance line until we forcefully break out with a long, strong candle. 🤩
I’ll be sending you the beat asap my boss. much respect 🫡