Hey, loved this update! The scene with Saita's labor was super intense and emotional—definitely had me on the edge of my seat. Bolx coming back was such a touching moment, and I could really feel the love and exhaustion Saita was going through. Also, Aidan reuniting with everyone was beautiful, especially forgiving Red-Eye like that. So much depth!
The shifts between emotional moments and Matta's journey were a bit sudden for me, though. Maybe just a bit more buildup would help with the flow there. The stuff about the time corridors and balance is really cool, but it’s a lot to process right after such a powerful birth scene.
Overall, amazing work as always! Can't wait to see how things play out with Saita and the twins now. Keep it up!
The jarring change was intentional. Almost as if ripping you away from a happy moment to realise the seriousness of what is happening in the background. Then coming back to the bittersweet ending making you want to know more about what happened.
However, thank you for the insight. I'll see where I can make some improvements.