Hi @jayna,
Your character profiles are fascinating, especially since I read them after I read @dwixer's and @raj808's. This exercise is like a Rorschach test of worldview. Each of you on a different continent, each of you bringing to the exercise your life experience. How vividly you describe the people you see.
As for your dialogue:
Maybe because I share some of your cultural background, the scene evoked by your dialogue is clear. In a few words you have drawn a character, a tragedy, and a resolution. A story is suggested, and could take shape from these few words.
Thank you very much @agmoore! I love that - a Rorschach test of worldview. I found it very interesting how different people interpreted the dialog and used their imaginations to bring the characters to life.