Ooooh the tree scene!!! You must have read the latest science studies on how trees actually do communicate with each other through their root system, but if you didn't, you already knew it intuitively. You show it happening in ways only fiction can, making it more real than science can. Erin drinks of the water and lets his mind reach out.... a rhythm builds... The trees at the base of the keep swayed in time with the rhythm of my incantation as I felt the trees meld with me fully. My arms were as wood, solid yet mutable, strong yet flexible. and I stood immutable like an ancient sycamore, stalwart, calm and unmovable. The guard's sword bending against the teak of my midsection.
The magic!
SPOILER ALERT if anyone reads comments before posts:
This part is goosebumpy awesome:
Elinair only came from the deeps of the woods in the direst need, and I had only met the mare once before when the Gretilins of Mermerln swamp had amassed to burn the sacred forest of Greenfolk.
"Jump my love."
And the forest welcoming Erin, uncle, and soulmate... I want to go there!
This is why I devoured fantasy in my childhood. I knew where I wanted to go, and stories like yours took me there.
Bravo!
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If any editor or critic ever accuses you of "purple prose," take it as a compliment. This!
While it's true that some prose may be overly purple in the hands of novice writers, this is sublime.
Thanks, I instinctually felt that it felt right and also good writing. Mainly because I'm trying to describe the world from the perspective of a wood elf who lives directly connected to nature in a fundamental and magical level.
The leaves really do dance and smile for the sun in an elf's perception... and if I'm honest, for me too on one of my more mentally effusive days 🙂 😂😆
You're my saviour with these comments Carol.
I thought it was going to be another long story with many hours in the writing, and editing, where the only comments I got was a two word spammy 'good post' and an automated message from our lovely resident 'definetly not fun' demental Christian spam attack team.
I'd read something about that on the internet but it wasn't in my mind as I wrote, well maybe subconsciously.
Me too. And as I was coming to the end of the story I felt a powerful compulsion for Erin to save his uncle, for him to bring him into his druidic world where sorrows evaporate like melting dew in the morning. Tolkien is the master at creating this feeling of timeless joy through the magic of elven realms, lothlorien being the one that springs to mind. I always loved those sections of his books where they're lifted out of danger and seemingly time, to these divine places of magic.
Thank you for that lovely compliment. To be included in the annals of fantasists that sparked that great escapism is high praise indeed.
I also devoured fantasy novels as a kid and my claim to fantasy fame is that I've read lord of the rings over 10 times, crazy I know. I also loved Ursula le guine earthsea, Terry brooks shanara books, anything by various authors in the dnd forgotten realms settings - but particularly - RA Salvatore and his drittz dourden books.
Escapism through fantasy fiction was a big part of my childhood as a died in the wool introvert. I still love reading fantasy and an currently on a book of shirt stories by Joe Abercrombie.
Your response to my reply is itself worthy of a whole new post, Raj, with a brief memoir on an introvert's childhood being peopled with fictional characters, and a list of your favorite books, and why you love the fantasy genre. Now I need to read everything on your list!
ha ha, I just re-read my comment to see if I could actually make a post out of it - which I might still - and I saw this typo 'and my cousin to game is that I've read lord of the rings over 10 times' 😆😆
That's what you get for writing comments on your phone at 3am in the morning. It's corrected now to read:
As to long and meaningful comments, you were my teacher! You always write real comments from the heart that actually respond to the content creators work. It is a sign of passion for writing that is not in everyone's make up. Definitely an editors trait.
Glad to have you here at The Ink Well carol!
P.s. check your twitter. I sent you a message about an opportunity that's available at The Ink Well. Nothing serious, just something that you might wanna look at and consider :)