Intro.....
(Music plays in the background)
Two lovers are having fun together
They are sitting down on a field enjoying each others company and the beautiful scenery
Tolu: (talking to Lola) am really glad to have you in my life.... You make my life better.
Lola: (smiles) I feel the same way too...(mood changes)
Tolu: (notices lolas mood suddenly changed) babe....what's wrong, is everything okay?... You suddenly just became silent.
Lola: yes...(trying to put on a brave face) everything is fine..(pauses).. Umm can you drop me home.. Please.. (Smiles)
Tolu: (looking skeptical) uhh yeah yeah sure...umm (looks around for his keys and finds it).. But you know if there's anything you can talk to me right?
Lola: I know... (Stands up) come, lets go..(pulls him up)
Tolu: (reluctantly) alright...
(It's been 3 days now, Daniel has not been able to reach lola. He then decides to go to her house to find out what's wrong)
(Back in Lola's house.. Lola looks rough, she is seen conversing with her closest friend Anita when they hear a knock on the door)
Lola: oh no, that could be Tolu... I can't... I can't talk to him like this (about to sob).. I mean I can't face him..
Anita: but baby girl, he's your boyfriend..,he deserves to know.. I mean, you need to talk to him.. Communicate with your partner, no matter how bad it may seem.
Lola: I..i...i.. I know... (Begins crying) but I can't face him yet..,please..just don't let him come in..I'm...I'm not ready..
Anita: (sighs).. Look...(long pause, looking with pity at Lola)...(goes to sit beside her on the bed) You know what?.. I'll do as you want.. But just promise me you'll tell him soon..(forces a smile to encourage Lola)
Lola: (chokes a sob).. I will...
(Anita walks to the door and slightly opens it)
Tolu: Anita, hey... What's up?... Is Lola around?... I've been trying to reach her for 3 days but she's not picking up my calls, it just keeps going to voicemail... Is... Is she okay?.. Like can I talk to her?
Anita: Mmm sorry Tolu, but nows not the best time... Am sorry but you have to go..(slowly closes the door, tolu puts out a hand to stop it)
Tolu: wait wait wait.. But why?.. What's wrong... Why is she not talking to me?.. Why is she ignoring me?.. (starts getting angry)... Is there another guy?... Wait she's cheating on me isn't she? That's why she's been ignoring me abi? Because there's another guy shey?... Is he inside?!
Anita: oh you're being paranoid, no one else is here apart from me... I've told you, now is not just a good time okay?... Just go tolu...please.. It's already getting loud.. Am sorry (shuts the door)
Tolu: Anita! (bangs the door)... Anita!!... Lola!!! (Still banging the door) Lola!!... Lola!!!... Okay fine!... I'm leaving!
(By now Lola has Walked up to the door and is sitting on the floor behind it with her friend standing close to her, Lola is crying)...
Tolu: (calming down... Talks sadly)... I just wish you could talk to me...(turns and walks away)
(Lola is still crying as tolu walks away from the door)
(it's been weeks now, Tolu has not picked up lola's calls or replied to her texts... All attempts to reach him prove abortive. She then decide to make a video, as her last resort seeing as time is not on her side anymore, hoping one day Tolu would get to watch it and understand her reasons for what she did and as well hopefully forgive her)
A few weeks later.......
Anita: (knocking loudly and hard on the door)Tolu! are you home!!!( shouting at the top of her voice)
Tolu: (comes to open the door) hey hold on Na... Who is...(opens the door and sees Anita) oh it's even you, why do you want to break my door.. And before you talk, am not talking to...(cut short by Anita)
Anita: Tolu you have to come with me now...it's urgent
Tolu: no way...am staying here and you can tell Lola that she should just forget about us too
Anita: something bad has happened Tolu... Please you have to come with me now... It's about Lola, there's no time( she drags him)
Tolu: relax Na...okay okay am coming am coming!
(They arrive at the hospital and enter the doctors office)
Tolu: is she sick ni this one that we are entering a doctors office or what happened
..
Dr Daniel: hello, my name is dr daniel, I was your girlfriend's doctor
Tolu: oh oh..(he pauses) what do you mean by was?
Dr Daniel: I mean I was treating her before...you see your girlfriend had cancer which was quite terminal.. She didn't have much time left and well was afraid to talk and had been having private consultations with me
Tolu: wait.. You mean...she was.....sick?
Dr Daniel: yes exactly...
Tolu: oh my...,I didn't know (feeling guilty)... Okay so where is she now.. Let me talk to her
Dr Daniel: (shaking his head) am sorry it's a bit too late for that now... Am soo sorry sir...but Lola is gone
Tolu: gone?!... Ehn where did she go to then (stands up in a bid to go find her but Anita pulls him down, a sad look playing across her face)
Anita: she's gone Tolu....(sobs) she's dead.
Tolu: what!!!... No no no...this can't be... Tell me it's not true Doctor (eyes soaking up with tears)
Dr Daniel: (turns to Anita) if you will, you may show it to him..
Tolu: show me what ( he demands)
(Anita plays him Lola's last video, explaining to Tolu everything that happened, how she felt, why she couldn't talk.. Why he saw what he saw ending by explaining how she'll always love him even in death)
(Tolu can't believe his eyes... The tears freely fall down his cheeks in a rush and he can't help but wail like a baby whilst repeating the words "am sorry" "I wish I had known" "you should have told me" "am sorry".
END....
You have an interesting writing style, @dele02. You might want to read some of the other stories in The Ink Well community to see how short stories are usually formatted. Typically, they are not centered. Dialog is in quotes. And the actions are written in regular prose, not as if a screenplay writer is informing a director about the staging of actors. :-)
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Thank you very much for this..I'll make some edits
Thanks @theinkwell I've made edit to the story and out out the full story