Fabulous. Nice fast paced narration, I was right in the middle of the action. While I was still reading, I had the thought that he probably runs around a bit too long and therefore the building would collapse along with him (I tried to guess the end:) When he takes the gun, the thought flashed that he could kill himself with it, only to find that he quickly has a change of heart and henceforth intends to get rid of any restraint (the shots outside indicate this). Finally no more consideration, rob what there is to rob and if necessary, use the gun. From messy pod dweller to marauders. It can go that fast, HaHa!
I've been to a few crazy meetings in the last two years where emergency backpacks and survival tools are the name of the game. Some people gathered around the presentation shuddering. I preferred to go out in the backyard and crack open a cold beer.
Further down I read that you wrote the story in one go. Those are the best. When it flows and you don't know yet, where it will lead you. I share your enthusiasm about it!
Hey @erh.germany! I'm happy I got your adrenaline running ;)
It always feels that way to me when I'm unprepared. I've had the fire alarm in my building go off in the middle of the night and getting ready to go outside is a slow moving nightmare.
Hah! Well put. We usually tell the story of the hero fighting against the marauders, but we rarely tell it it from the marauder's point of view. There is a reason why someone would choose robbery in a dire situation. In the protagonist's case, he seems to be very disorganized. Maybe the moral of the story is not prepare for tomorrow, but clean up your room. :)
I've never been to one of those, but I've learned quite a bit over the years because of hiking and camping. You gotta be prepared when you're in the wilderness.
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