Liana is a 9-year-old girl but she has a strong determination to control our destiny to chooses not to leave it for chance. she doesn't want an unpredictable future but instead a planned and decided future for her self.
Lianna is the second daughter of Singha. A man who became remarkably famous after defeating a tiger in a cage fight for Relza, the king's daughter. He has two daughters Ama and Liana. Liana is the second daughter of Singha, the King's servant.
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Liana is a enchanting, fair, short, beautiful girl with a radiant brown eyeball, straw-like, punky tail hairstyles, and a dazzling plump body structure. Almost alike her mother's picture frame and placed in his father's room.
Liana woke up and rush to her father's room while it was still dark one morning, breathing heavily. she are just woke up from a scary nightmare and her dad allowed her in.
Singha, her father comforts her, led her back to her room and watches over her as she sleeps, showing his care and concern for her well-being. The warmth of his presence eased her fears, and she felt safe knowing he was there. As she drifted back to sleep, the lingering feeling of security lingered.
One day, she went to the market with her sister Ama, the girl spots a man who resembles someone from her dream, leaving her surprised and distracted. The familiarity of the man's features sent a shiver down her spine, making her look intently, doubting if there are boundaries between dreams and reality. As she gazed in amaze, it aroses her hesitant to approach the man. Ama, noticing her sister's unease, touched her and tried to understand what was bothering her.
When she turned to look at the man again, but he was no where to be found and this lead to a dumbfounded feeling which made her to follow Ama quietly without saying a word even though her sister asked.
The girl notices the man she saw in her dream is not present when she tries to point him out to her sister, leading her to follow Ama without mentioning anything. Confusion clouded her mind as she scanned the bustling market for any sign of the mysterious man. The absence of his presence left her puzzled, wondering if it was all a figment of her imagination. Choosing to keep her thoughts to herself, she decided to focus on her sister's company instead.
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Two days after, Liana had a dream, it was almost like the same she had earlier but this time around, she discussed with the strange man. Wike was the master of the ship and he is very gentle with Liana in his speech. He was so disciplined and would not lay his finger on Liana or even look at her on her face. He introduced himself to Liana as the transporter to the future.
In the dream, she gave Liana a ring to wear on her hand which will connect them together anytime she likes to see him. She woke up and the ring was on her finger. and wanted to rush out to her dad but she hesitated for a while and decided not to let her dad know about it. Pretty enough, she likes the pretty, pink ring on her pinky finger.
She kept the ring inside her box so that her father and sister would not notice it and take it away from her. She thought to herself for a moment and mused it loud saying “I am the super girl.” She dashed out when her sister called her for breakfast.
Hello @hive-elite. We are pleased to see you writing creatively. There are many fine qualities in this story. Chief among these qualities is the character portrayal of the young girl. However, there are some issues that need to be addressed.
We require our authors to support others in the community by commenting on at least two stories for each story they submit. We note you have not done this. Also, although the story does have a strong character, it doesn't have a strong arc. An arc satisfies the resolution of a conflict. In this case, you introduce a mystery man, but you do not let the readers know anything about this man. Why has he come? What are his intentions? Why did he pick Liana to visit?
This is a story with an interesting premise. Readers are left with questions. It is the author's job to answer those questions.
Overall, you have made some good points here. We hope to see you develop your writing skills more in the future.
Thank you.
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