XVI
Torundel didn't give a shit. But the Count did. As much as he'd hated the shitposts in the beginning, the Count was now bathing in the bliss of the idolatry he'd been subject too since his identity was leaked by his scholars.
He enjoyed it, but he didn't understand it.
One day the Count said, ‘Isn't it really rather base - mocking a person with sentences of genitalia and bodily fluids? Look! My scoundrel opponent writes, “ … crawling through the hairy hedge of mother's cunt: the greatest thing you ever did. All you did hereafter was only ever shit!” It's distasteful! You said yourself rhyming was ignoble!’
The silence of the scholars made the Count stop… and blush. The archivist who had spoken to Torundel weeks earlier and was now his greatest admirer, said in a harsh tone: ‘breaking rules, milord, is considered manly – daring – They just has to be broken in the right place at the right time.’
The Count furiously turned to Torundel stammering in his effort to say something nasty. ‘You are invited to my Isolexit ball as a thank you for your… poetry. But you need to buy a wife. Bachelors are not allowed.’
The Count obviously tried to humiliate him.
Torundel didn't give a shit.
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Torundel the Shitposter! A serial fiction that follow these rules:
211 words - Starting with the word Torundel - First and last sentence are identical.
As I am not a native English speaker please inform me if something is misspelled, wrong or just horrendous English, and I will see if I can fix it.
Earlier episodes:
Part I
Part II
Part III
Part IV
Part V
Part VI
Part VII
Part VIII
Part IX
Part X
Part XI
Part XII
Part XIII
Part XIV
Part XV
Isolexit? https://isolex.it ???
Well, I hope the count knows the difference between, End of Confinement Day, and Italian insulation :)
Wait. the Count steals Torundel's wife, then demands that Torundel buy another one just to come to the party? I can see why Torundel doesn't give a shit.
I'm not sure who is mocking whom in this, or who is speaking. A few more names and a few fewer pronouns would help me.
Agree, I will be looking into it tomorrow. Here it is midnight so I will go to bed.
Now it is better with "The count" and "My scoundrel opponent" thrown in aggressively everywhere.
Much better! I was reading it quite wrong that first time around. Thanks for fixing it.
I am the one who says thank you. When posting my comic pages I use to give high upvotes to people who can find things to improve. Proofreading is valuable even though it often is done for free,
Alright then, I love to proofread, and get quite nit-picky about my own stuff. I have some gaps in knowledge, especially regarding the proper use of commas, and my sentences tend to be too long, as is this one. @carolkean might be able to help. But I'll be happy to do it!
Commas are always a problem. I am good at using them in Danish (which has two systems - a new reformed and the old based on the German where you put 1000 commas in each sentence to convince people that you are capable of syntax analysis). When learning to write in a foreign language commas are probably the last thing you will master.
Another thing is that commas also are a writing instrument and sometimes not following the rules can be an artistic choice.
Yes, he is hard pressed by the rich and powerful. Soon he will have to do something about it. I have decided to do this in 21 episodes as 211 episodes was a bit too much for this little story. I have made some sketches as my Saturday procrastination project and think I can squeeze it all in there.
I can't imagine. I've never planned even one episode of a story - mine all start out as freewrites, then I tinker with them for days if I think there's somewhere to take them. 21 seems a lot, but 211 seems unimaginable!
At first It was not planned, but I have sort of a method for doing such things. When I have finished Torundel I will write about it in the worldbuilding community.