Parents have a difficult job when raising children. On the one hand, a parent has to encourage a child to play. On the other other hand, a parent also has to put an end to childish games not suitable for children. In this case the ring appears to be a real object with extraordinary powers, but still the mother understands that a child should not be in possession of so much power, and so she takes step to protect her daughter. Well told story. I feel that the ending is a bit short. You tell us that the mother finds out and hides the ring, but I think that this is such an important scene that it's preferable to show us how the mother found out about the ring and her reaction when she saw what this amazing artifact can do. I enjoyed reading your imaginative story.
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Thank you for reading me and giving me such an important suggestion @litguru . You are right I should have developed that important part of the story. Perhaps unconsciously I left it for each reader to think about how it was that day, when Eliana's mother discovered that the ring had magical powers...
I know what you mean. I like to give clues to the readers, so they can figure it out. It's a fine balance between saying too much or too little. It's always fun!