Everyone thought Trevor was weird, he thought everyone was boring.
You create these two characters so well, making me genuinely believe and care about their friendship. I loved the first lines. You build the suspense well and then left me hanging too - what DID happen? A great way to conclude a well told tale!
It really makes me smile to read that, thank you for the fantastic comment!
I think if I had another 500 words, I'd have used it to develop Argus as a character. I think it would be terrible to witness an event like that, to need to begin the first officious step to properly handle it. Then everyone thinks YOU could be guilty? Oh poor Argus 😭
I originally had much more about him in my first draft, but I've been trying REALLY hard not to go over 1500 words too often 🤣 (thanks for your hard work ink well team!)
Sometimes a cliff hanger is good fun, the arc was finished, so no one can be mad at me! I'm glad that added value for you 😁 !PIZZA
It'd be fun to redraft to shift between the two sets of characters - the kids and Argus - in a kind of dual narrative, a third person omniscience perhaps. It's definitely a story that could be rewritten in many different ways. I do like that ending as its a great cliff hanger and doesn't NEED expanding - all we need to know is he wasn't what we thought he was, or that anyone suspected him to be. I think it's really good!!!