It is interesting that the disruption in rainy season was such a huge event in this village, however it is hard to understand why one storm without crops in the ground caused so much chaos here. It would have been wonderful to see some development of Bolaji's character too, so that the dialog between he and his wives gave us more insight into how they feel.
We often provide feedback to writers who are just getting started. The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories. We hope you will take the time to look through them.
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