Thank you for sharing this story with us. You create the scene well, and pull us into your narrative quickly. However, this piece does not have essential elements of a story structure.Hello @gbemidwolf,
A story has a definite arc. It starts, presents a conflict, and then resolves the conflict. Here you have the scene, and the beginning of a conflict--where is he? can he be seen? should he sell his clothes?--but not one that is clearly defined. Also, you leave off without a resolution. What happens? Does he sell his clothes? Does he wake up? Does he find he has been robbed? Perhaps he has been drugged and that's why he has this dream?
You can see the possibilities. It is the author's job in a story to answer the questions. We have a post that offers tips on how to write a story in the traditional sense. In this 'tip' post you will find clearly explained the elements of a story arc.
You have an interesting perspective and something to say. These are essential ingredients in story writing. Please write again and try to use the tips in our post as an approximate guide.
Have a great Sunday.