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RE: The Wedding / La Boda - The Ink Well Prompt #105

in The Ink Well • 2 years ago

You have some great lines in this story, @jadams2k18.

Don't get me wrong, I love my sister. But sometimes I think I'm adopted.

You've created a wry tone that works really well for this storyline. And your narrator is so strong and well-portrayed. Nicely done!

One tip: In this like, it is Cinthia speaking, but it is her sister that is concerned she has made a mistake. You might want to edit that. 🙂

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    Thank you! I love your input very much.

    One tip: In this like, it is Cinthia speaking, but it is her sister that is concerned she has made a mistake. You might want to edit that.

    I don't know what you mean. Cinthia is the narrator of the story, however, she doesn't take action until her sister confirms that she is also worried when she realizes that her prince charming is not as perfect as she imagined (he smoked and stuff).

    o.O?

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