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RE: Lost With The Memories

in The Ink Welllast year

An incredibly sad story, @marriot5464. To lose one's life partner negligently at ones' own hands is tragic indeed. You paint a picture of complete despair in grief. I did, however, find this a little heavy on the emotive narrative. Sometimes less makes more of an impact. His decision to become a monk in the end also felt rather sudden and unexpected. Good fiction requires balance, and it would have elevated your story if you had injected more conversation and action into the piece. It needed something to drive the story forward.

Thank you for writing in The Ink Well. We look forward to reading more of your stories.