- I find the beginning of the eighth part particularly beautiful.
Summer drained away, marked by the presence of cool winds. The days had been getting shorter for a while, but it was around the time when one really began to notice.
Barton felt Gabriella draining away too.
- To improve your initiative, I can think of an interwoven story where the reader chooses between different possibilities through the links and, depending on the choice he/she makes, the story has several endings.
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