Hmmm, nice poetry...
I observe a rise and fall in intonation and then a sudden rise again on the last line.
At first it was a steady rise in form of sharp events around and then it drops tactically into pity and unhappiness.
One would however imagine that the poem ends on a sad note until the last line where the narrator actually seems to know his calling.
This is my creed; I am a soldier, warrior by choice, In this life and the next.
And by far the best line
Nice critic. You really understand the complexity of the poem. You need to read the part 1 to get a crystalized picture of the soldiers dilemma. Thanks for reading though.
Ahh, Not a critic, you got me wrong there bro.
i simply analysed the poem,
i don't know how to critic,
I'm just a poet myself.
Apropos: i don't see anything wrong with your poetry