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RE: WAR: A SOLDIERS PRAYER PART II

in #poetry7 years ago

Hmmm, nice poetry...

I observe a rise and fall in intonation and then a sudden rise again on the last line.

At first it was a steady rise in form of sharp events around and then it drops tactically into pity and unhappiness.

One would however imagine that the poem ends on a sad note until the last line where the narrator actually seems to know his calling.

This is my creed; I am a soldier, warrior by choice, In this life and the next.

And by far the best line

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Nice critic. You really understand the complexity of the poem. You need to read the part 1 to get a crystalized picture of the soldiers dilemma. Thanks for reading though.

Ahh, Not a critic, you got me wrong there bro.
i simply analysed the poem,
i don't know how to critic,
I'm just a poet myself.

Apropos: i don't see anything wrong with your poetry