You are viewing a single comment's thread from:RE: RUMI REMIXView the full contextjmvanbreda (68)in #poetry • 7 years ago In line 8, did you mean 'soul' instead of "souls"? That's the only correction I'd make. A good poem nonetheless.
Actually it depicts the individuality....by this I actually mean that my soul is broken into pieces .....The soul breaks when you are at the peak of LOVE.....and that what I m trying to visualize...
SOULS
Oh I see. It just confused me with "souls spills". Maybe 'souls spill' would read better. Anyway, best to you.☺