'Eyelids' - an Original Poem

[lazarus-wist]

you didn’t get my message
as I told it to you
on a hidden frequency.

your conception of yourself
exists at odds with my
conception of you
                                    and
when I conceive myself
at odds with you,
then what I’m really saying
is I disagree that
either of us has a rightful
claim to individuality.

the way I see things
your conception of
                      "the both of us"
has got to go.

the way I see things
we are both the colour
of the inside
of our eyelids.

@lazarus-wist

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Comments

[veckinon]

the way I see things
your conception of
"the both of us"
has got to go.

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(sorry, I am not sure how to match your formatting)

I really liked this stanza in particular and I feel it is one a lot of people could relate to.

[lazarus-wist]

Thanks for your feedback @veckinon - glad you found something relatable :)

[slowdancer58]

Great idea....and DEEP with a capital "D" !

[lazarus-wist]

Thanks for your kind words friend.

[madevi]

Wow! Very nice and oddly formatted poem, I loved it. I have writen on the same subject, but in a completely different way. I particularly liked the last stanza very much!

the way I see things
we are both the colour
of the inside
of our eyelids

Well done :D

[liverussian]

when I conceive myself
at odds with you...

Being in complete harmony can never allow us to realize who we really are...