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RE: Try Not To Cry

in #poetry7 years ago

Hey man! I really like your stuff. I don't know if you've experimented with different forms/structures before, but I think you could definitely have some fun with line breaks. For example:

"We are the truth
in false clouds,
our path is special and
unrepeatable in pure intentions
of love.
Wake up dormant power,
you are a mysticism that
drives all my victories
in the ocean of challenges -
I love you
in the perfect form
of new movements
on the wall of spiritual art."

If you want to, play around with it a little. If not, I completely understand. I just like to play with line breaks because they can sometimes create double meanings or just enhance the flow of the poem. A sort of stream of consciousness effect.

Regardless, it's really good stuff and I look forward to reading more of your work!

-Lukas Wendell Hughes

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I also post lovely poems daliy @adenijiadeshina. You can please try checking out those lovely poems at @adenijiadeshina and i hope you love them. Thank you for your support