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RE: The Mausoleum part 2

in #story-mentor7 years ago (edited)

Thanks for your guidance right now it is a bit like trying to learn to ride a bike.
I made some changes ... in case you ever see the post again I think it is better.
I introduced Ralph briefly and replaced the cat with a thunderstorm.
Also did a few more things. :)

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I made a suggestion or two - I hope you don't mind and feel free to disregard :)