Marco here, using the Bananafish account because I was reading haiku.... ;)
I could not wait to read this story, although I would like to see the Italian version!
Knowing the plot already in advance, I was bewitched by the style of writing: there are some descriptions that amaze me for the imagination and the originality of the evoked images ("A tooth embedded in the dark gum of the land of Sicily" ... how could it have occurred to you? I find it almost unimaginable). A rich and varied style, full of games and subtexts.
There are those who have done research on Google to penetrate the mystery of your writing, I do not want to do it, I just get carried away in this story of metamorphosis, power and sexual symbolism.
Ciao Marco! The Italian version is "our" version, I totally understand. I polished this pretty much with phrasal verbs, proper lexicon and sentence structure, so I wouldn't say that the Italian one sounds better. Notwithstanding, M. found some small glitches, hehe. That image is a prelude about the home having fangs. You're right, there's an amount of hidden messages and I had fun in inserting them.. knowing a bit of principles of magic, I have to pay attention to not play too much with this stuff. Oh wait.. this is an idea for another short story! 😜 Thank you Marco, your appreciation means a lot for me.