Hey Eric, just wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed “Missing Time”.
If you end up also publishing it somewhere else, a typo and possible re-wording to consider for edits:
Part 1:
he felt more intune with the moment
Probably in tune as two words here. Intune is a Microsoft product.
Part 2:
by the time you’ve eliminated enough bars gone to escape
Seemed a bit confusing. Maybe instead,
by the time you’ve eliminated enough bars to escape
or possibly
by the time enough bars are gone to escape
I'm glad you enjoyed the story, @preparedwombat and thanks for pointing out these issues! Missing Time was a fun one to write. It's with the editors at the New Yorker now.
I have a few more in the works now. It's been difficult to get into the groove while on the road but after we're back in Minnesota in a week I'll be able to get some serious work done on them. My plan is to publish a short story collection in book form for release before the end of 2020.
I hope all is well and the weather isn't too bad back home.