Awesome post! Love it. I've worked in this area a lot. I have a sister in law who is a director for the city of Oklahoma parks and rec. She is a dance instructor and theater person by background. She also is black, with a white husband. They have faced some really unique challenges regarding this, thanks for your work to improve it.
Now, for the critique. The assignment was to include a bucket brigade. You could promise to share a link to a tool, or a story that would point it out, then remind us, then present it at the end. That is the only critique I have here, you've gotten 87 VIEWS on this piece already! Dang! Nice! And 19 votes. good job. If you decide to edit in a bucket brigade, let me know, I'll consider it for revenue share tonight.
Hey thanks so much for saying so! I’ve been really humbled by how much people have responded to this post via comments and whatnot...nice to know that people will engage with this kind of work! I’m not entirely sure I understand the bucket brigade method...I went back in and tried to add some teasers about “sharing the work with you” here and there before the section on the tips. Fingers crossed that’s what you meant?
I'll take a look. The simplest example would be I'm goin to solve all your problems, but first...I didn't forget, think about this....and now I'm going to share this, but before I do....The reveal
It's not a technique you'll likely use a lot. It's very salesy, but as an exercise, it gets us to think about creating expectation in our readers and keeping them just slightly off balance, tilted toward us so that they can't stop reading.
Aw okay, that makes more sense. I won’t do a ton of re-writing on this one, but I’ll definitely try to incorporate this technique a little more directly into another post before the end of #bootcamp! Cheers. :)
Don't do it for me. Your writing is great. You'd never have gotten that suggestion from me on this post, if it were not part of an assignment designed around that trick. LOL These blogs need to uniquely reflect each of you. If the tips fit, use them, but just like any acting tip,or art trick, if it doesn't work for you, don't use it.
Sounds great, I actually did blend it in a bit better. It’s less for “you” and more about me enjoying the challenge of trying to incorporate a new technique in my writing style (hey, the more tools the better, right?). Thanks for the feedback and I think I have a solid understanding of how to use this tip now. :)
Great!