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RE: WRITING IMPACT CHALLENGE | A Whisper, No More (Original Poetry)

in #writingimpact7 years ago

This piece reads so smooth, @naquoya; may I ask if it is a refined stream of consciousness that brought it about? It almost seems a number of interlaced thoughts and meanings all trying to weave a greater tapestry, but only part of the tapestry is here.

I liked the notion of interacting with the ethereal you have sewn here in lines such as:

A language unknown to the touch
So I breathe

and,

Will my feet touch the ground,
Or the voice find its song?

along with the cyclical nature of all things, the clever tie in of our lead:

The language of silence
A whisper, no more

There is almost a tangible melody of melancholy ringing as a minor chord from your piece, @naquoya, but not of surrender, I think. There is a calm strength here, it's between the ethereal you have sewn, and comprehension that there is value and wisdom even in silence.

Thank you for the share. z_thank_you.png

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Thank you for your detailed and thoughtful comment. I would say that this is definitely a stream of consciousness here. The word choices offered seemed to speak as i sat down to write, so they were well chosen, and allowed a theme to emerge. I'm very glad that this spoke clearly to you, and you could see the connection between ideas and imagery here.