haiku by Angiola Inglese (2019)
Welcome to the 29th edition of the Mizu No Oto contest, haiku friends!
Refreshed by the break week, I’m ready to give you a new photo to delight you in composing haiku.
I remind you, as far as possible, to read the other participants' haikus and to cast your vote.
To facilitate the reading, I advise you to report the haiku you have chosen for the contest in the comments, along with the link to the post.
I also remind you that it is allowed to participate with a single haiku, even if you can post some more for the sheer pleasure of doing it (but I ask you to indicate precisely what you intend to participate with).
Let’s the contest begin!
[Traducción Española]
¡Bienvenidos a la edición número 29 del concurso Mizu No Oto, amigos del haiku!
Refrescado por la semana de descanso, estoy listo para darle una nueva foto para deleitarle en la composición del haiku.
Le recuerdo, en la medida de lo posible, que lea los haikus de los otros participantes y emita su voto.
Para facilitar la lectura, le aconsejo que informe el haiku que ha elegido para el concurso en los comentarios, junto con el enlace a la publicación.
También le recuerdo que está permitido participar con un solo haiku, incluso si puede publicar algo más por el simple placer de hacerlo (pero le pido que indique con precisión con qué pretende participar).
¡Que comience el concurso!
For those that want to unleash their poetic potential, here is how this contest works:
• Look at the prompt image and let yourself be inspired by it.
• Write a haiku related to the prompt image. The haiku should be composed by 1-3 short verses with no title. The classical haiku form is 3 verses of 5/7/5 syllables, but other forms are allowed, as long as they remain in absolute brevity.
• The haiku should be in English or include an English translation.
• Post the haiku on your blog or in the comment section below this post. If you make your own post, don’t forget to put the link to it in the comment section below!
Don't forget to use the tag:
#haikucontest
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Prompt Image:
[photo by @calluna]
• Kireji (切れ字), a cut between the 1st and the 2nd verses, or between the 2nd and the 3rd; the cut can be grammatical, as a sign of punctuation, or it can be a cut in the meaning, like two different images.
• Kigo (季語), an explicit or implicit reference to a season, that defines the time of the year in which the haiku is composed or referred to.
• Sabi (寂), the sense of the inexorable passage of time, the beauty or serenity that accompanies the advance of age, when the life of the objects and its impermanence are highlighted by patina and wear or by any visible repairs.
• Wabi (侘寂), the taste for frugal and natural things, rustic simplicity, freshness or silence; it can be applied to both natural and artificial objects, or even non-ostentatious elegance.
• Mono no aware (物の哀れ), empathy with nature and human life; the "feeling of things", nostalgia, regret for the passing of time, understanding of the changeability and of the transience without suffering.
• Yūgen (幽玄), sense of wonder and mystery; it represents the state of mind produced by the inexplicable fascination of things, the feeling of an 'other' universe, full of mysterious unity.
• Karumi (軽み), beauty in simplicity; poetic beauty reflected in its simplicity, free from preconceptions and moral judgment.
• Shiori (しおり), gentleness; the levity and the delicate charm that radiates from the verses, where things are evoked in the reader without aggressiveness or excessive explicitness.
Submission deadline: Wednesday 1sth May, 10:00 PM, GMT +1 (Rome Time).
The results will be out on Thursday 2nd May, 10:00 PM, GMT +1 (Rome Time).
The Naturalistic Component
We have seen that haiku refers to the present experience of the author.
This experience always has to do with nature, both when it speaks about phenomena and manifestations of the natural world, and when it speaks about human events that are intertwined with these phenomena.
Already the ancient waka poetry largely had a naturalistic argument: contemplation and mystical union between man and the world.
For Japanese poetry, nature is the external place where it is possible to get in touch with one's own profound "I", in an intimate and immediate way.
Reading haiku anthologies from different eras, it is very difficult to find something that investigates the essence of the individual beyond naturalistic evidence. On the contrary, it seems that there is no further truth, besides the "absolute truth" of natural daily life.
The haiku does not express judgment of beauty, ugliness, goodness or malice, it only describes the innate essence of things.
What matters is the mild and unexpected surprise that strikes both the author and the reader in noticing an apparently banal everyday object or situation, seeing it with a new perspective angle, like instantaneous and unrepeatable illumination.
烏 が だ ま つ て と ん で 行 つ た
karasu ga damatte tonde itta
a crow
got up in flight
noiselessly
(Ozaki Hōsai)
[Traducción española]
El componente naturalista
Hemos visto que el haiku se refiere a la experiencia actual del autor.
Esta experiencia siempre tiene que ver con la naturaleza, tanto cuando habla de fenómenos y manifestaciones del mundo natural, como cuando habla de eventos humanos que se entrelazan con estos fenómenos.
Ya la poesía antigua waka tenía en gran parte un argumento naturalista: la contemplación y la unión mística entre el hombre y el mundo.
Para la poesía japonesa, la naturaleza es el lugar externo donde es posible ponerse en contacto con el propio "Yo" profundo, de una manera íntima e inmediata.
Leyendo antologías haiku de diferentes épocas, es muy difícil encontrar algo que investigue la esencia del individuo más allá de la evidencia naturalista. Por el contrario, parece que no hay más verdad, además de la "verdad absoluta" de la vida cotidiana natural.
El haiku no expresa un juicio de belleza, fealdad, bondad o malicia, solo describe la esencia innata de las cosas.
Lo que importa es la leve e inesperada sorpresa que golpea tanto al autor como al lector al darse cuenta de un objeto o situación cotidiana aparentemente banal, al verlo con un nuevo ángulo de perspectiva, como una iluminación instantánea e irrepetible.
烏 が だ ま つ て と ん で 行 つ た
karasu ga damatte tonde itta
un cuervo
se levantó en vuelo
sin ruido
(Ozaki Hōsai)
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Hello! This is the first time I write a haiku and I participate in this contest, but here I leave my participation, I hope you like it.
Greenery in calm.
Lost in your thoughts
the friend waits
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Verdor en calma.
Perdido en sus pensamientos,
el amigo espera.
Que bueno verte por aquí querida @isauris, mucha suerte en el concurso tu haiku inspira paz.
Me alegra verla por aquí 😊 gracias por las buenas vibras, suerte para usted también ❤
Welcome to Mizu No Oto! Not bad, not bad at all...keep on writing haiku. It's addictive ;)
Oh yes, it is!!
So beautiful world,
That even the beasts behold.
They have a soul too!
https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@darthgexe/mizu-no-oto-29-every-image-has-its-haiku
Is a dog a beast?
Such congenial companions
More like us than not
It's a beautiful haiku, but I don't see dogs as beasts :)
I did not intend to use the term beast in a derogatory manner if that seems to be the case, I apologize.
Certainly, the word can be something subjective, in my haiku I mean not only dogs, but I wanted to extend to all animals in general, so I use the word beast as a synonym for an animal.
Dogs, although domesticated and trained, are still animals, they are loyal and very noble creatures, but they do not have the same degree of awareness as humans.
I still respect your vision and understand it, and I apologize if my poem seemed a little denigrating to our four-legged companions.
I like the word "beast" in this case. I also was trying to catch the primal nature of the dog, doing what a dog does, not at all negative.
And that the dog "beholds", a word that has spiritual meaning for me, helps me to feel the power of the scene. There is a lot of depth in your simple words @darthgexe. very nice.
I like your defense. And I agree, the word "beholds" elevates not only the dog, but the haiku. It is a lovely, thoughtful haiku.
I didn't mean to criticize...this is poetry and my reaction was emotional, not intellectual. I'm a softy when it comes to dogs.
Don't worry, it's okay, buddy. I understand.
To add a little spice to the dispute (in a good-natured and amused sense) I could say that I personally do not believe in the existence of a soul distinct from the body... :P
(Marco)
Wandered very far.
I lost my master again.
Follow Fall winds home.
These are fun. Please keep them coming.
I like this image, even though in reality I believe that the mistress was very close, and taking the picture ;)
( I have corrected the image a bit, so detailes in the shades
be more visible. not crusial, but nevertheles... regards!)
here is my take on it, very all of a sudden.
its my 1st time, so... any remarks are much appreciated.
my dog
left alive
but where is the boy?
very much more clear and lighting is everything thanks some details are better observed @qwerrie
muchisimo mas nitido y la iluminación lo es todo gracias se observan mejor algunos detalles
I think I may have commented on this on your blog, but here it is again
Where is the boy?! I find this a bit alarming, as if the boy has just fallen over the edge of the cliff and the dog doesn't know what to do. The changed photo, while clarifying some things, does not evoke early morning as well as the original.
This haiku fully captures the spirit, with originality in outlining a situation that seems tragic!
Higher perspective
Climb a mountain to achieve
Be Canine Alpine
I expected humor from you ;)
I was deadly serious...
The sea is calling
And I hear my master too
Chase the gulls or not?
So many great entries to read!
Welcome to Mizu No Oto! There are always a lot of great entries! Thank you for yours!
One haiku:
The lure of instinct
Rooted in genetic code
Yearning for the wild
That a great thought one :)
Thank you. Maybe that will be the one I choose to enter :)
Haiku lovers: I leave the link of my entry to the contest and my exercise, grateful for the call of @bananafish.
https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@gracielaacevedo/mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29-english
I will read your poems, with pleasure, to comment.
dear and loyal, dog.
Friend, wait for me.
I love this...
Thank you
I also see the dog as alert. Alert in its love, in its care, always loyal.
...and alone, waiting
Another haiku:
Loamy earth under
Blue sky with billowing clouds
Peace in solitude
Vote your favorite haiku down here:
I love the haiku by @qwerrie
Very poetic and suggests a deep sadness in the reader's mind. Qwerrie gets my vote this week.
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I love @sayury as rewritten by @raj808. If the rewrite is true to the spanish original, this is the one of all that I have read (and I have read most of them! - so many this time!) that best captures the power I myself feel standing in such a spot at such a time.
So many beautiful haiku. I think this week @raj808's is my favorite. Not only is his haiku conceptually satisfying but his language soars.
My fav haiku is @sayury
This haiku has a lovely aspect of self reflection. There is a yearning wondering at the world that I imagine a dog might have when looking out from three peak of the fells.
🙂
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This week my favorite poem is the haiku by @cyemela.
The one by @darthgexe is very sweet
My vote is for @oacevedo.
I loved your participation and I quote here the comment that I left in it:
Among the exercises I could read, I like the exercises of @isauris, @oacevedo, @flordi, @salvao, @sayuri and @jmvanbreda. In all of them there is a sensitive perception of the landscape and the moment represented by the dog. I vote for the exercise of @oacevedo, that offers us a subtle sensitivity and of great interiorization of what that landscape could mean before the condition of that observer.
Hello, on this occasion I have read many of the poems presented. I really liked @josemalavem, @gracielaacevedo and @jacuzzi haikus. But, above all the others, I loved @johannfrare poem. Let me repeat it here so that more participants can appreciate it:
The certainty of life exemplified with simplicity and depth, Spectacular!I'm very sorry, but @johannfrare posted after the deadline, so he's not in the competition this week. But I agree, the haiku is very good.
Ops... let me vote for @jacuzzi then ;)
Awe shucks. Thanks Salvao. %)
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Hi all! Happy to be here again xDD
https://steemit.com/spanish/@salvao/myentryformizunooto29espeng-dwqz4iqlem
Mi fiel amigo,
el frescor de los campos
nos acompaña.
My faithful friend,
the freshness of the fields
accompanies us.
Hola, @salvao! Lindo haiku, es alegre y fresco . mucha suerte!
Hello, here I bring my haiku:
distance is like a sweet dream
far away off silence
and you can read it too in this link: https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@flordi/mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29-english
This haiku gives me the feeling that the dog is about to spring into action and run joyfully. How lovely!
Reciban mis saludos, amigos del Mizu no oto.
Esta es mi entrada: https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@oacevedo/mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29-english
To the top of the world
a lonely dog goes.
Un largo, largo camino.
A la cima del mundo
va un perro solitario.
Saludos, estimado @oacevedo! Ando explorando este singular mundo del haiku y este en particular me parece de una belleza extraordinaria. El camino a la cima del mundo es definitivamente largo y la cima misma un lugar solitario, tal y como lo son aquellos lugares difíciles de alcanzar. Me gusta la visión que a tenido de la fotografía, muy contraria a la mía; para mi ese perro es un amigo que espera, pero para usted es un ser que avanza o que avanzó y mira sobre sus pasos el camino recorrido; lo cual me hace tener una nueva perspectiva. Su poema invita a la reflexión y me gustan los poemas que me hacen reflexionar.
Greetings, dear @oacevedo! I am exploring this unique world of haiku and this one in particular seems to me of an extraordinary beauty. The road to the top of the world is definitely long and the summit itself a lonely place, just like those places that are difficult to reach. I like the vision he had of photography, very contrary to mine; For me that dog is a friend who waits, but for you it is a being that advances or that has already advanced and looks at its steps the way traveled; which makes me have a new perspective. His poem invites reflection and I like the poems that make me reflect.
Hi. Here's my entry.
https://partiko.app/jmvanbreda/haiku-edition-29-entry-tdabqrox?referrer=jmvanbreda
a dog's bark is lost
between two distant echoes -
the green valley yawns
Beautiful. Haunting.
Nice capture of the distance in the photo.
Yawns suggest the morning to me.
I like this.
Another:
If I were happy
My tail would advertise joy
What mood strikes me now?
I love the line 'my tail would advertise joy' 🙂
Such a clever and accurate reflection of the personality of dog 😉
Thank you. Few things seem more enthusiastic than the tail of a happy dog. It's infectious.
Dear friend @agmoore / @agmoore2, your three haiku are all beautiful. Have you decided which one of those is the entry?
Thank you! I suppose this one:
The lure of instinct
Rooted in genetic code
Yearning for the wild
It was fun to write.
Good luck in choosing winners from so many gems. I don't envy you this task.
Hi @bananafish peeps. It's been a while and I've been dealing with some health issues... but I wanted to join in with a Haiku in this wonderful comp as I've not done a Mizu No Oto - Every Image Has Its Haiku in a while.
Here is my entry :)
https://steemit.com/poetry/@raj808/the-collie-waits-mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29
Hermoso haiku @raj808, la imagen que das con la linea the wool-scented breeze wafts es muy bella y sensorial. Hace sentir la brisa y olerla. Buena suerte en el concurso.
Beautiful haiku @raj808, the image you give with the line the wool-scented breeze wafts is very beautiful and sensory. It makes the breeze feel and smell it. Good luck in the contest.
Thanks 🙂
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I can smell the sheep! I can feel them smell the dog!
I had to look up the word croft - it's a good word and I am very happy I now know it.
Nice work.
Thanks Owasco. I'm glad the haiku inspired you to learn a new word.
Verify is one of my favourite words for farm 🙂
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Hi, everybody, here is my haiku:
but my endless soul from here
to embrace all seems
Cuán ancho es el mundo
pero mi alma infinita desde aquí
parece abrazarlo todo
And this the link of my post: https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@sayury/mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29-english
P.s. I've just a few suggestions for the English version for it to make more sense.
You could change just two words and still maintain the 5/7/5 lines.
How wide is the worldbut my endless soul from hereembraces the whole.I'm sure the Spanish version is much more beautiful and as I can't read Spanish it's my loss to see it as it's meant to be read. Forgive me my editing, it's a force of habit ;-)
Muchas gracias @raj808, una de mis razones para participar en este concurso es, precisamente, la de pulir mi inglés, así que valoro mucho este tipo de ediciones. No se si puedo modificar el texto para el concurso, lo hice una vez ya (En este) porque tenía una rima involuntaria.
Thank you @raj808! I think your editing is great, the only thing that is missing from the Spanish original is in the 3rd verse: with "embraces the whole", you gave a sense of certainty, while in Spanish "parece abrazarlo todo", it seems that it embraces all the world. It's more nuanced... anyway thank you very much!
There is a lovely yearning in this Haiku @sayury. It encourages the reader to wonder at distance and imagine what waits out in the blue beyond.
Very nice. Good luck in the contest :)
I love @raj808 rewrite of @sayury haiku. I'm going to speak about that one as if @sayury wrote it. Hopefully the rewritten version is true to the original.
I love this one. It's my favorite so far. It captures both immensity and the eternal. The dog could be any soul swept away by both of these. It could be me. While sitting here at my kitchen table, I can smell the air and feel the power on that hilltop. Great!
and I'd like to add that my awareness of the immense shrinks to a pinpoint at the word "here". I travel in time and space and it all becomes one at the end, like an acid trip in 17 syllables.
How true to the original is this one? I'd like to hear from any spanish speakers if you wouldn't mind. thank you
Upvoted and resteemed
Enchanting challenge and a whole life experience, interpreting in a few words what your eyes see and what your heart feels.
Encantador reto y toda una experiencia de vida, interpretar en pocas palabras los que tus ojos ven y lo que tu corazón siente.
https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@sacra97/mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29-english-wolf-and-the-immensity
My entry https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@javert68justice/mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29-english
Mi voto es para el Haiku de @sayury
Hello @bananafish here is my entry https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@felixgarciap/the-look-haiku-contest-week-29-english
Will he though? Will the dog triumph?
It certainly looks as though it will, lord of the world on this hilltop.
I like the vision of the dog as a conqueror. I did not see it that way. How nice to be able to see what others see in just a few words!
Of course we always have to keep in mind the vision of success. Thanks for your valuable comment.
My entry:
Blue sky, green valley;
"I can see my house from here!"
Views with a good friend
https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@wolffeys/my-entry-mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29
Thank you, @bananafish!!!
That is a lovely picture. Two of my favorite things: a dog and countryside. Haiku are inevitable here. Thanks for letting us write more than one, although only one for competition. I don't really regard this as a competition anyway. More as a creative exercise. So get ready. Too tired to do my chores, so I might as well write haiku.
Sounds good. Know what you mean.
Here is my entry
frost dusted buds
soften at the cockcrow
spirit quickens
https://steempeak.com/haikucontest/@owasco/mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29-english
My humble entry:
https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@cyemela/mizu-no-oto-haiku-contest-week-29-bananafish
I'm copying your haiku here so that I can talk about it without the cumbersome going back and forth between windows.
Spring dawn green valley -
Many years sentry of sheep,
songs of birds again.
Here I know this scene has had enormous power for millenia, watched over by sheep for centuries, but every year the birds sing again come spring. It's a lovely moment in eternal time. Very good!
Thanks @owasco. Appreciate the feedback. That's the intent of this haiku.
https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@lecumberre/mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-29-english
Nice photograph!
Upvoted, resteemed and promoted.
Sugiero que, aunque sea en inglés la ocasión, haya traducción al español, ya que los de habla hispana hacen esfuerzos por escribir en inglés, y así podríamos entender, sin tener que apelar al traductor automático.
Estimado @lecumberre, esta es precisamente la razón por la que mis compañeros Bananafish Knights y yo decidimos dividir el concurso entre las ediciones en inglés y las ediciones en español.
De esta manera, cada dos semanas todos tienen la oportunidad de expresarse en su idioma favorito y la capacidad de apreciar y juzgar el haiku de los demás.
Mi idea era solo la de poder tener la traducción a la mano. El haiku es súper, y por eso lo he disfrutado en grande. Y en nombre de Dios, seguiré.
I greet you in this new meeting of Mizu No Oto
Good luck to you all! Here I leave you my participation: https://steemit.com/haiku/@evagavilan/mizunooto-everyimagehasitshaiku-edition29english-orm8kd06uf
into infinite space.
Unreachable
♦♦♦
Lánguida mirada
al espacio infinito.
Inalcanzable
Hermoso! encierra una bella tristeza, una empañada nostalgia. Mucha suerte ❤
Greetings, followers of this pleasing contest. I leave here the link of my post, as well as the exercise in English (in the post I transcribe my version in Spanish).
https://steemit.com/steempress/@josemalavem/mizunooto-everyimagehasitshaiku-edition29english-ob92dwhz1f
In fresh and clean day
from the top the dog serene
glimps the infinite
Saludos, estimado @josemalavem! Estos versos trasmiten mucha calma, mucha paz. Suerte en el concurso ❤
Hi! :P
https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@johannfrare/7urhdo8s3z
Sorry, out of time!
Interesting haiku, anyway!