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RE: The Ink Well Prompt #17: Action, Dialogue, Narrative | She Lost It

in The Ink Well4 years ago

Ouch. To be less important than a family pet is a fear many of us live with daily! So I'm sure this story will resonate with a lot of people.

It was Friday, pizza night, and she was complaining that he had not wanted to propose to her after six years of relationship. She spoke her truths, which she listed chaotically. She said she felt stuck, unloved, sick of pizza and hot dogs, tired of not attending family gatherings together and not having been properly introduced to her mother yet.

This beautifully captures the way in which problems between two people can build over time. After six years of having the problems build, and then realizing at last that she will never be as important as the cat, she just can't take it anymore.

She certainly needs to move on. I'm just glad the cat is really okay!

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Thanks,@jayna!

I think Ethan was not so much into Christine after all, but she waited for too long. Butcher was alright. I couldn't hurt Butcher.
I'm glad those lines called your attention; I tried to use that list as a summary of Christine's motivations to dump Ethan, so the reader could understand her and feel some empathy.

Thanks again :)