DOWNVOTE! 100%!
LOL! JK
It's a freewrite, so there's bound to be some mistakes. At one point in one of them I had to delete the sentence I was writing and rewrite it because I switched perspectives to 3rd person for some reason.
I'm pretty sure you're right on spat. I won't agree with you on the piss though. I wanted it to be gross, not vomitous. It's just like a really gross combinations of flavors that he can't stand, in addition to being stale.
I was no longer sure whether he is inside the ship , in a gravity free zone? and if so how does he just quickly enter and exit other parts that I assume would have gravity?
The ship has no gravity, but he has electromagnet boots, called mag-boots. It's actually really hard for me to properly stick to that, so there might be mistakes.
Thank you for the explanation and maybe also a bad on my part for not having read the previous. A very nice read and not that it matters but I am quite picky at what I read, although here I have been reading a wide variety of things.
Beats spending hours trying to find just the right book.
Well, I hope you won't rip my little freewrite novella to shreds if you read through it.
But, even if you do, I appreciate the feedback, as long as it's constructive.