Hahaha! :))) The last think I thought is that someone will form his story on the actual event. I enjoyed every single paragraph and had fun with the inner dialogue. I'll definitely show it to few friends LOL :) And looks like it has captured a lot of people's attention and love. Well done @negativer!
Did the humor work for you? I think that's the trickiest part of writing a fictonal story. Finding sincere humor that is not distracting but is genuinely funny is a fine line, without being overbearing.
I think sometimes humor can be forced and apparent that the author is trying. This seemed perfectly natural as a part of the character's observations and behaviors. I liked it!
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I need to improve my English more to understand more about your writing. But what is surprise, I really enjoy reading your post! Thank you for writing and sharing! Followed upvoted and tip!
Thanks! To me, we're all kind of like that, especially when we're alone. We have little debates with ourselves, make up little stories, and generally behave differently compared to when we're with others.
Do you believe in aliens? I read it twice sometimes its harder for to read longer posts, which is why I'm an artist and don't s writer, but I grasped it the second time. Nice story, keep up the good work!
Thanks for the comments, and for reading! I was kind of subtle in my hints in the story, I know. But if it was a long novel, the truth would eventually be revealed! (In my mind, I had the main character as being at least a clever fellow with some degree of supernatural powers)
Thanks! I think short stories need to have a bit of a twist, since you don't hold the reader long enough to really develop characters or a deep storyline.
I have a general idea of how I want to go, and where I want it to end up, and a general feeling for what KIND of story it will be (scifi/sad/hardcore/comedy/whatever) but the journey itself is pretty wide open. You just kind of write without thinking too much about it, and when you do that you can put yourself more in the character's shoes and write about what he's seeing or feeling or thinking.
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Hahaha! :))) The last think I thought is that someone will form his story on the actual event. I enjoyed every single paragraph and had fun with the inner dialogue. I'll definitely show it to few friends LOL :) And looks like it has captured a lot of people's attention and love. Well done @negativer!
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's fun to try and drag a decent story out of a basic and simple photo. Sometimes you end up in weird places.
Absolutely :O))
Did the humor work for you? I think that's the trickiest part of writing a fictonal story. Finding sincere humor that is not distracting but is genuinely funny is a fine line, without being overbearing.
I think sometimes humor can be forced and apparent that the author is trying. This seemed perfectly natural as a part of the character's observations and behaviors. I liked it!
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I need to improve my English more to understand more about your writing. But what is surprise, I really enjoy reading your post! Thank you for writing and sharing! Followed upvoted and tip!
Thanks! I know I use a few non-typical words sometimes, but if you still enjoyed it then I'm happy!
Love the inner monologue of you protagonist. :-D
Thanks! To me, we're all kind of like that, especially when we're alone. We have little debates with ourselves, make up little stories, and generally behave differently compared to when we're with others.
Totally true! For me at least.
I believe in aliens 👽
I'm glad you got the subtle hints at something otherworldly here. If this was a full sized novel we'd eventually find out if that's accurate or not.
Niiiiiiceee my friend ^^
Thanks for reading! :)
What a great article I just read. Thank you for making me happy with this text. I will continue to follow your work. Great piece of humanity here.
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STOPDo you believe in aliens? I read it twice sometimes its harder for to read longer posts, which is why I'm an artist and don't s writer, but I grasped it the second time. Nice story, keep up the good work!
Thanks for the comments, and for reading! I was kind of subtle in my hints in the story, I know. But if it was a long novel, the truth would eventually be revealed! (In my mind, I had the main character as being at least a clever fellow with some degree of supernatural powers)
Very clever and descriptive. It definitely holds a different kind of aha pleasure reading it a second time.
Thanks! I think short stories need to have a bit of a twist, since you don't hold the reader long enough to really develop characters or a deep storyline.
Yes, it's definitely a different kind of skill set. Do you write with the end in mind first, or the whole idea, or just make it up as you go?
I have a general idea of how I want to go, and where I want it to end up, and a general feeling for what KIND of story it will be (scifi/sad/hardcore/comedy/whatever) but the journey itself is pretty wide open. You just kind of write without thinking too much about it, and when you do that you can put yourself more in the character's shoes and write about what he's seeing or feeling or thinking.
hey, well done, you win the internet again.
although this was the other day of course.
And you paid for lunch, but not a hospital one.
great post.
I really should keep up