The low scrub of the forest opened out a little as I sniffed the air in the afternoon swelter. The soft hoots of sleepy Macaque settled my mind as the crickets song waned to an occasional chirrup. The musk from the rutting Neelgai inflamed my nostrils as my mind raced with the thought of blood, the quiet stalk and then the wrestle of muscle and sinew. I sniffed the scratch and smear of fur, mingling with the sensual bark of the sandalwood tree. She was close, the woods hummed with her scent as I dropped my belly to the earth and the trees gave way to the sedge meadow. Flies buzzed around my eyes and jowls as I yawned the afternoon heat.
Sudden loud, braying sounds of human voices invaded my focus. Right in the path of the prey scent. The meadow shimmered in heat waves, as the two humans grazed the grass like monkeys foraging. One was bent over, back offered up in supplication. I stalked, belly tickled by the blades of sedge, raising a sweet scent all around while the pump of blood focused my mind like an arrow.
Orange-black streaking muscle hit me hard in the throat as Aasa shrieked a high pitch wail and the soft hoots of the Macaque broke into hullabaloo, marking the tiger's attack. I wrestled to grab hold of the tiger's forelegs but the maw clamped down on me. Agony shot burning pulses as my head bent unnaturally and, half upside down, I saw Aasa tearing away through the grass to reach the path at the edge of the clearing. Oblivion beckoned now, as the tiger crunched through bone, embracing me tightly, closing me down at the throat. The world flashed on and off.
I saw my face, flop limply to the ground as the prey was dropped. Smelled the copper blood as I licked my jowls and bent my head to pick up the meat by the broken neck. Fierce thumping heartbeat struck a rhythm in my head as the predator's victory song wound its way through every fiber of my being and I watched a crimson stream trickle between bulging eyes. Life infused me, I would eat tonight.
To be continued...
Cool story. Keep going!
Thanks @seckorama. I am planning to publish a new part based on a freewrite prompt at least every 2 days. The second part is out now :-)
Nice one, looking forward to the next part..
Thanks @ablaze. I am planning to publish a new part based on a freewrite prompt at least every 2 days. The second part is out now :-)
I love the narrative vibe. you captured the hunt very vividly
Thanks @abmakko. Yeah, the hunting tiger was based on a dream I had where I was a tiger and I hunted and killed myself in the dream. It was pretty much a nightmare but the descriptions in this freewrite came directly from that dream so maybe it was good for something ;-) I am planning to publish a new part based on a freewrite prompt at least every 2 days. The second part is out now :-)
WHOA! That was intense! Such a beautiful depth to your descriptions, so much tension in the words, suspense... amazing! Your writing is getting even better and better! I really liked this a lot.
Also, today I am here in a rush of spastic, distracted thoughts to deliver Today’s Daily Prompt for the freewrite. Feel free to join us if you have the time and thank you for joining us today! It is such an awesome community to be a part of and now we have a new page with contests, new challenges and even more community:
Thanks @byn. I can't believe this but I'd already written the second part in this series from today's prompt earlier. I was quick off the mark today ;-) thank you for your encouragement and lovely comment
Well you're doing better than me! I usually deliver prompts in the morning, but I didn't realize that today was Thursday until late afternoon! Oops!
So well written. Such uncomfortable subject. super!
Cheers mate. Glad your digging this series 😁
Glad to see you striking out and challenging yourself! I love the detail from the senses and how they wrapped around me as I read! Your ending with the tiger feeling so alive and victorious set my heart racing!
Thanks @brisby. This was so easy to write as it was a dream I had which many might think sounds like a nightmare but it wasn't like that. Although sureal, it was like a double edge sword, the fear/panic of being attacked and then the overwhelming instinctual joy of the kill as the tiger. The dream ended with a victorious feeling, despite me being able to see my own dead face in the prey as as I devoured it.
Lol, after reading that back I'm thinking that maybe I might come off a little nuts 😉 but I guess when I had that dream, a good few years ago, my subconscious was working through some things. Thanks for checking out my ongoing freewite. Glad you enjoyed it
Orange-black streaking muscle hit me hard in the throat as Aasa shrieked a high pitch wail and the soft hoots of the Macaque broke into ... wow! Descriptive, fast-paced, action-packed 5-minute freewrite! Well done, Raj!
Thanks @carolkean. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and it's gratifying that you noticed the pace as I felt like I achieved the effect of frantic movement in this freewrite that I wanted. As long as people are reading and enjoying, I am gonna keep writing them :-)
Just read all your series so far. Love them. Will be regular reader :)
That's great @felt.buzz. I love the series format for the freewrites, mind you non of the prompts have tripped me up yet so maybe I'll change my tune when I get hit with an awkward one ;-)
Well, the trick is not to allow logic to tie you in to a story. Anything is possible. That is what is freeing about the freewrites! :)
I am looking forward to the next one. Thanks for sharing on ListNerds.
Thanks @rcaine
I will be sure to make sure I get all 10 of these series out each day for people like yourself who are enjoying the building story.
Thanks for reading 🙂